First THREE people to offer critiques on my query will receive a query critique in return. If you want, I'll even post your query to my blog for public critique. Let me know if you're BRAVE enough for it. Critique will be completed before Thanksgiving but I'll aim to finish them before Monday.
If you've received a crit from me within the last month, I'd love to hear your advice but this critique opportunity is for newish queries.
Special consideration if you write a longer critique (I'm taking a few paragraphs). Comment the time you start the critique first (ie Started 7:27pm) then comment the actual critique. I'll consider the time you started rather than the time you finished.
Slave to an alcoholic father and therapist to an emotionally dependent brother, sixteen-year-old Damien Crown is the glue holding the shattered pieces of his family together. Between quelling his dad’s rage after happy hour and maneuvering around his brother's tender emotional state, Damien doesn’t have time for friends or school.
Until he wakes up dead.
Killed by an out-of-control driver, not only does Damien wake up in a new body but he also gets a life-coach. Ironically, that life-coach is Death. Granted one more year at life as a new kid in his old school, Damien is no longer bound by the responsibilities of family. No father, no brother, no stress, right?
Wrong. When his brother comes to school with bandaged wrists and a grave demeanor, Damien is dragged back into the problems of his old life. Only this time, he’s forbidden to make any contact under Death’s promise of ‘dire consequences’. Forced to watch from the sideline as his brother deteriorates further in depression, Damien is caught between living his new life and fixing his old one. (One more sentence to drive the stakes home. Been working on it for ages. Haven’t quite got it.)
MY BEST FRIEND, DEATH is a 64,000 word Contemporary Paranormal? that would blah blah blah. Bio…