Jun 22, 2017

QK Round 3 Wrap-Up


Round 3 of this tournament is officially over. All kontenders fought valiantly, but alas, half of you must be knocked out. Win or lose, thanks for officially making QK the toughest query tournament in all the land. Be proud of yourselves for making it this far.  A standing ovation to those of you who fought and came out victorious. A full 48 entries out of the 64 that started this tournament have been eliminated. Those left can practically smell the title of QK Grand Champion. Best of luck in Round 4, kontenders. You're going to need it.
 
Round 4 will be hosted on Laura's blog from June 24th-25th. Below is not only a list of who made it into the 4th round, but who entrants be match against as well


Bounty and the Beast vs. From Gutters to Galleries
Boy Band Ninja Assassins vs. Book Boys Gone Wild
Delicious Vicious Cycles vs. Hero By Default
Alabama Witch Hunters vs. Be Grateful for Cookies 

Good Luck!!!

Jun 20, 2017

Query Kombat Round 3 Begins!



Here we go! Round 3!


Entries are on Mike's Blog! This round lasts until June 22nd at 8 pm.


On Thursday, the hosts will call out for extra judges to come and break ties, or in case of extra close votes to try and get a more decisive margin. 

The entry with the most votes for Victory moves forward to the fourth round on June 24th!


Kombatants will not have any more chances to revise for the rest of the contest.


Reminders for the Entrants:

No commenting on your own entries until the last day of the round. If there is a problem with your entry, shout out to us on Twitter as soon as you can. If you don't have Twitter, you may comment on your entry telling me the mistake.

Also, we tried our hardest to make the match-ups as fair as possible and against as similar stories as possible. But, obviously, this is impossible to do perfectly and some match-ups may seen very random. We apologize for this but it's an evil of the system.

Kombatants should comment on 4 other match-ups to help share the love around!


Reminders for the Judges:

Wait until after one of us hosts comments on each entry first and reply to that comment to cast your votes. Try making your votes objective instead of subjective (but if you really love an entry subjectively, don't even feel bad about saying it was a subjective vote - subjectivity rules!).

Make sure to post under your nicknames!

QK Round 3: Alabama Witch Hunters vs Girl of Your Nightmares

 Match-up closed to voting due to offer of rep. Alabama Witch Hunters is advancing!


Title: Southern Fried Witch Hunters
Entry Nickname: Alabama Witch Hunters
Word Count: 45,000
Genre: MG Horror

Query:

Twelve-year-old José Villa wants to be brave like his best friend, Bubba, but he’s more terrified than a fresh bass at a fish fry. So he accepts his role as sidekick in Bubba’s daring, and mostly harebrained, schemes and adventures.
But when José sneaks into a pasture with Bubba in the middle of the night, he encounters a horror he couldn’t have imagined: zombie freaking cows. Oh, and the evil witch Agatha Winters, back from the dead and ready to get revenge on the town that killed her. Not knowing what to do, José and Bubba team up with a young witch expert. Together, the trio works to stop Agatha, encountering a creepy undertaker, an incompetent sheriff, and a horde of demonic squirrels along the way.

When his friends get locked up, it’s up to José to become the hero of the story. He must overcome his fears and stop Agatha before she hoodwinks the whole town into jumping from the same cliff they pushed her off of years ago.

First 250: 

An angry wind echoed through the night as I read the cracked wooden sign nailed to the fence. “Warning: Trespassers will be skinned alive and deep fried.”

A chill rattled my shoulders. It’d be a miracle if I lived to see the seventh grade.

Bubba sniffed the fresh manure in the air and grinned. “It’s tipping time.”

In Trout Bend, Alabama, cow tipping wasn’t just a hobby. It was an art form. All the best tippers came from our town, but the greatest of them all happened to be my best friend, Bubba, better known around these parts as the da Vinci of the Dairy.

Unfortunately, like most great artists, Bubba had started to go a little bit loco. Actually, scratch that. There was nothing little about it. That boy was nuttier than a pack of rabid squirrels on a cashew binge. I mean, why else would he have dragged me out to Buck Miller’s pasture in the middle of the night?

I gulped. “Bubba, are you sure this is a smart idea?”

He laughed as he squeezed his round body between a couple strands of barbed wire. “Course it ain’t no smart idea, José. But it’s like my daddy always says, ‘Ain’t nobody ever have any fun being smart.’”


I wanted to point out that nobody had ever been arrested for being smart either, but Bubba didn’t like talking about that. I took a deep breath and slid my way through the fence.





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Title: Lucid
Entry Nickname: Girl of Your Nightmares
Word Count: 93K
Genre: YA Psychological Suspense (ownvoices)

Query:

All Marlowe wants is control. Of herself, of her environment, and most importantly, of the people around her. When an attempt to prove the strength of her self-control through sleep deprivation lands Marlowe in the infirmary of The Diana Banesbury School for Exceptional Young Women, she crosses paths with Gwyn, Sloane, and Ellie. Gwyn, who developed major depression after the death of her brother, wants closure she’ll never get. Sloane, recovering from a black eye, wants an adventure to save her from the monotony of her daily life. Ellie, a student volunteer who recently transferred from her small hometown to the exclusive girl’s boarding school, just wants friends to make the adjustment easier.

When Ellie offers lucid dreaming—the ability to control one’s dreams—as an unconventional solution to each of their problems, Marlowe sees a better opportunity. Under the pretext of a club for learning lucid dreaming, Marlowe convinces the girls to move to an abandoned classroom in the woods around the school, aiming to gain control by gaslighting and manipulating them until they’re incapable of differentiating reality from dream. As Gwyn, Sloane, and Ellie question their identities, realities, and the lies Marlowe has bound them with, they must find a way to wake themselves from her influence before they reach the end of a path leading to psychological destruction and death.

First 250:

People didn’t tend to believe that insects had free will, but Marlowe never doubted. If something had free will, she could control it. The fly was no exception.

Marlowe was halfway through the second day of her vigil when the fly landed on the bulb of the green shaded lamp on her bedside table. The rest of the girls in the dormitory were asleep, which left Marlowe alone with the dark, the quiet, and the long wooden room with its vaulted ceilings and double rows of beds. She was wearing her favorite silk pajamas and doing fairly well considering it’d been nearly three days since she last slept.

She watched the fly intently, the way its filmy wings shuddered, how it threaded its spindly, segmented arms back and forth through its proboscis whenever it took a break from its paces along the surface of the hot glass. Once they’d been properly acquainted, Marlowe devoted her thin morning hours to mentally coaxing it in one direction or the other, “Come here,” “Go there,” over and over again.

Most of the time, it wouldn’t. But on the rare occasion that its movements aligned with her mental command, she became re-energized by the illusion that her will had been so strong that the insect had been unable to resist, that the sheer force of her own thoughts had pushed it back onto the glass bulb when it wandered off. She indulged in the fantasy that this small, fragile thing would burn itself alive if she wanted it.

QK Round 3: Be Grateful For Cookies vs Perfectly Imperfect Princess

Title: Plus-Size
Entry Nickname: Be Grateful For Cookies
Word Count: 45,000
Genre: Middle Grade Contemporary

Query:

Thirteen-year-old Lizzie will do almost anything for a cookie. Sadly, her mother banned them from her life months ago, replacing sweets with tasteless foods and a gym membership. Her mom claims it’s for her own good, even though her skinny sister can still eat whatever she wants.

Doomed to a life of flaxseed and broccoli, Lizzie joins what she believes is an after school cooking club, hoping to make chocolate-anything on the sly. When the teacher announces they'll also be sewing, Lizzie discovers a knack for designing stylish plus-size clothes, something she desperately needs. After the owner of a local boutique sees one of Lizzie's shirts with the message BE STRONG sewn across the back, she asks Lizzie to reveal her inspirational clothing to the public with a fashion show. Lizzie hesitantly agrees —she’s never been comfortable being the center of attention, and her mother’s lecture about her hopeless future as a larger girl is on a constant auto-play in her head.

Faced with an overpowering mom, a group of relentless school bullies, and some embarrassing mishaps at the gym, Lizzie realizes how important it is to BE YOU — a phrase on one of her shirts. Armed with her collection and a chance to show her mother that success comes in all sizes, Lizzie sets out to prove there's more to a person than the size of their waist.

First 250:

From the moment I stepped onto Aunt Teri and Uncle Joe’s patio, they taunted me. My eyes darted away, trying my best to ignore them, but I knew they were there. Every summer, my aunt and uncle hosted a huge neighborhood cookout. Mom had warned me on the car ride over to be good. "A little self-control goes a long way." The words still echoed in my head.

Hearing Aunt Teri behind me, my heart began to race. No doubt she had them with her.

You can do this, I reminded myself. You’re better than they are.

“Lizzie,” Aunt Teri called.

Her hand clasped my shoulder. She twirled me around.

“It’s so lovely to see you. And my, look how big you’ve gotten. Chip?”

She thrust the dreaded bowl in my face. They were the kind with ridges. The kind covered with that powdered sour cream and onion stuff I loved. I forced a smile.

“No thanks. I’m good.”

She shrugged and began to walk away.

“Wait!” I yelled. “I mean …” Rushing over to her, I dug my chubby fingers into the bowl, emerging with a fistful of my forbidden fare. “Maybe just a couple. Thanks.”

My eyes darted up, meeting my mother’s glare through Aunt Teri’s kitchen window. I threw the chips in the trash and grabbed a piece of celery off of the veggie tray instead. My hand lingered over the dip, but knew mom could see and quickly moved it away. I was in for a long afternoon.




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Title: Penelope Charming and the Poisoned Glass Slippers
Entry Nickname: Perfectly Imperfect Princess
Word Count: 53K
Genre: Middle Grade Fantasy

Query:

Twelve-year-old Princess Penelope, daughter of Cinderella, has a “charmed life.” Closets full of ruffly dresses (itchy), classes at the prestigious Charming Academy (boring), and her very own fairy godmother (annoying). Penelope would trade them all for her mother’s signature on an adventure slip to travel outside the castle walls. Too bad Cinderella refuses to sign.

Exploring secret passages and games of capture-the-frog are fun, but when a rival princess dares Penelope to steal her mother’s glass slippers, her craving for adventure results in shattered shoes days before the annual ball. Smashed slippers are small peas to Penelope, but to a villain plotting the end to her mother’s Happily Ever After, it’s a perfectly twisted opportunity. The replacement glass slippers are poisoned, casting Cinderella into a deathly slumber.

Determined to save her mother’s life, Penelope searches for the origin of the mysterious poison. Once upon a time, an antidote existed. Lucky for Penelope, her new friend Jack may know where to find it. With Jack’s promise to guide them, Penelope and her best friend, Red, sneak out of the castle walls to travel into the forbidden Beanstalk Forest. Penelope’s wish to explore Fablewood becomes a race to find the antidote ingredients to wake her mother before she sleeps forever after.

First 250:

Glass slippers made terrible frog-capturing shoes. Each footstep clink-clinked on the stepping stones or slurped in the mushy mud. Plus, the cold glass pinched my toes. I kicked them off my feet and dropped to the ground to peer through the rose bush. A small, green frog lay stretched out on the edge of the wishing well, belly up to the sun.

Once upon a time, a princess ventured through the wilds of Fablewood...

I tightened the sash around my slingshot before squeezing under the bush. A thorn snagged the frilly hem of my dress, tearing the fabric with a loud rip. I froze. The frog stretched his scrawny arms, wiggled a teeny bit, and relaxed. He hadn’t heard me. The frog was mine. I crawled to the well and paused.

One happily ever after...two happily ever after...three happily ever after.

She was Princess Penelope, daughter of Cinderella. One slimy beastie was no match for her.

“Surrender!” I sprang to my feet. Only a wet spot glistened on the stones. “Rotten peas!”

As I leaned over the well, searching for the frog, he leaped from his hiding spot beside a broken stone onto my shoulder.

“Gotcha, Princess Penelope!” Smirking, he poked my cheek with a twig.

 I glared into his scum-colored, googly eyes. “Phib! When did you know I was coming?"

 “I saw you leave the castle.” Phib flourished the twig like a fencing sword, bowed, and strolled down my arm. The dank smell of algae mixed with jasmine tickled my nose: eau de Phib.

QK Round 3: Book Boys Gone Wild vs Nowhere Land

Title: Paper Seeds
Entry Nickname: Book Boys Gone Wild!
Word Count: 109K
Genre: YA Contemporary Fantasy

Query: 

When seventeen-year-old Harlow Jackson gets dumped at her grandma Minny's wake, she's devastated, pissed as hell, and without an escort for the debutante season starting the very next day. But then Harlow finds something Minny left her: paper seeds. Minny always told her that if you place a magical paper seed in a book, and plant it in the ground, you can grow anything you desire from its pages.

In a fit of desperation, revenge, and, okay fine, a little too much funeral punch, Harlow grows teenage versions of Mr. Knightley, Sherlock Holmes, Dorian Gray, and Dracula to be her and her friends' debutante escorts. Because everyone knows there's only one thing better than a handsome, well-groomed, drawling Southern beau... an English gentleman. Harlow is tired of feeling second rate in her small Southern town, and vows to use the boys to beat her ex, and the mean-girl debutantes, at their own game. Frankly, she'd love to burn their perfect curls off their pretty little heads, but that would just be gravy. Instead, she'll settle for winning the debutante crown and the accompanying cash scholarship prize, which she badly needs.

Harlow passes the boys off as four rather eccentric foreign exchange students, and everything goes according to plan until the book-boys discover their own origins and run amok. At the same time, the town witch, Madame LeRoux, comes after Harlow for the paper seeds, claiming that planting them will have dark consequences for Harlow and the people she loves. Harlow must uncover the origin and twisted history of the paper seeds to discover a way to undo what she's grown. But as generations of town secrets and lies begin to unravel, Harlow discovers it was her beloved grandmother Minny who may have been hiding the biggest, ugliest secret of them all.

First 250:

If I hadn’t been standing in the middle of my grandmother Minny's wake, I would have whacked that boy in the man parts so hard, people would be looking at pictures of his children in years to come and say—see the funny ear that kid has? Harlow Jackson did that.

But Jonathan took my hand and squeezed it, like he was bestowing some sort of warm comfort on me. He wore the gray shirt I'd saved up a week's wages for, the one that was the exact color of his eyes.

Now, I wanted to rip it off him.

And not in a good way.

I took a deep breath and tried to be civil. “Your parents will get used to the idea of us. I have a way of winning people over, you know.” I smiled my most becoming smile and flashed my dimple. Jonathan loved my dimple. Everyone loved my dimple.

He closed his eyes. “It’s not that, Harlow.”

“Then what is it?” I said, too loud.

Madison Pace cocked her ear in our direction as she scooped bean dip onto her plate at the food table. Nosey was not an adjective in this town, it was a given.

I tugged Jonathan’s hand, and he followed me out onto the front porch. The sky was gray, just waiting to burst open, the air heavy and thick. October in Georgia was not a cool, crisp autumn. It’s more like standing over a pot of boiling pasta. Or maybe more like being the pasta.





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Title:  FOLLOW THE SUN
Entry Title:  Nowhere Land
Word Count:  75K
Genre: Historical YA (#ownvoices)

Query:

In 1969, Rett syndrome is unheard of. But come hell or high water, Jackie is determined to discover the reason why her four-year-old sister, Evie, suddenly lost the ability to speak and control her hands.  Her parents find it easiest to accept their small town doctor’s generic diagnosis that Evie was born with physical and mental impairments. Jackie doesn’t buy it. Evie wasn’t born that way; she regressed just before turning two.  So, Jackie spends months secretly mailing letters to various doctors around the country. She’s convinced that if she can find one expert with a possible explanation for Evie’s symptoms, it will force her parents down a path toward determining the cause.

That’s a lot to handle for a seventeen-year-old, though, and no amount of getting drunk with her flower child friends, flirting with a guy who’s caught her eye, or bickering with her June Cleaver-ish mother keeps Evie’s condition from constantly gnawing away at the back of Jackie’s mind. When she finally hears of a doctor in Austria who might have an answer to the riddle that is Evie, Jackie’s world begins to brighten.  But, Evie’s disability becomes too much of a hassle for her self-absorbed mother and father, and they make plans to institutionalize her in another state.

Devastated by the idea of separation from Evie, Jackie makes a rash decision:  she’ll take off on a planned trip with her friends to the Woodstock music festival, and she’ll never come back. If Evie won’t be in Everton anymore, Jackie doesn’t want to be either. But she can’t shake the feeling that the best place for Evie is with her family.  As Woodstock ends, Jackie must decide to either find a new life elsewhere or return home to reveal the information she discovered to her parents and convince them that Evie is capable of more than they believe.  If only they’ll listen.
 
First 250: 

Woodstock Music & Art Fair, August 1969
Day One – Late Afternoon

I inhale the scents of lost inhibitions disguised as weed and booze. They’re so thick it’s as if I can reach out and touch them; literally get a contact high. It’s a pretty killer scene, and after hours of waiting, the music’s finally starting. For most, time has no place here. You simply exist. You are here. It is today. The time is now. And it’s all good. But my mind flickers like the flashes of a camera between photos of the before and the after. The past and the present.

Between Evie and this field full of strangers.

The odors surrounding me vanish, replaced by the memory of more comforting aromas: cookies and apple juice. I smile, in spite of myself. But those thoughts angle my mind toward others that curdle my stomach, like Evie at the supper table with my parents, her hands tying themselves in knots. I’m not in my seat next to her, and she doesn’t understand why. The image of her face in my head pushes each beat of my heart one notch higher on the threshold of pain in my chest. As if some great chasm has cracked along my sternum, leaking a burning fire through the rest of my body.

I ache to see her, but I can’t go back home. Not after what I found out. Not after what I learned.

I swear I’ll never go back to Everton.

QK Round 3: This Selkie Can't Swim vs Hero By Default

Title: IN HER OWN SKIN
Entry Nickname: This Selkie Can't Swim
Word Count: 70K
Genre: YA Contemporary Fantasy

Query:

At sixteen, Emily is an extraordinarily fast varsity swimmer, until one day the chlorine burns like acid and she nearly drowns. Unable to swim in the pool again, she hears voices calling her into the ocean. A long-submerged memory of her mother walking into the sea, never to return, floats to the surface. Hunting for proof her mother didn't die in a car accident like her father said, Emily uncovers a bundle of old letters from friends and family she's never heard of. They all have the same return address: an island in Nova Scotia. When her father refuses to answer her questions, Emily sneaks away to Canada over winter break—alone.

But when Emily arrives her supposed family won't talk to her and they threaten to send her packing. Her only help comes from Fiona, a seventeen-year-old activist whose friendship provides the intimacy Emily has always lacked. After days of cat-and-mouse, Fiona reveals the island's secret: they’re both daughters of selkies, a species of Scottish seal shape-shifters. The selkies’ isolation protects them from fur hunters, but temptation draws some to human company. Eventually, they return to the sea, leaving behind any half-human children. Children like Emily.

With time running out before school starts, and her romantic feelings for Fiona getting stronger, Emily fights for the truth about her mother's death, and if she willingly abandoned her. When Emily's attempt to claim her selkie heritage puts the island's inhabitants in danger from tourists and pelt hunters, she must choose between an ordinary human life cut off from the fleeing selkies, or a solution that will save the selkies and trap her as a seal forever.

First 250:

If Coach Gina says one more good word about me, I may scream. Coach thinks reading our meet times every week is motivating. I just want to crawl into a hole.

Every time she says my name, I expect this to be the time the team glares at me with jealousy.

"100 free, Emily Mulligan, 49:51."

Instead, the girls whoop and clap for me, because my points are their points. They don’t care where the numbers come from. Cheers bounce around the pool and I catch David grinning at me from the other side, not paying attention as the boys' coach also reads. When his name is called the guys thump him on the back and chant, "Ecklestein! Ecklestein!"

We're a pair of winners, a matched set, the perfect couple.

So why don't I enjoy any of it?

If it weren't for Dad, I wouldn't be here.

I jump in for warm-ups, the water swallowing me. I rush downward, the bottom twelve feet below. When I slow, I open my eyes and gaze up through the jelly-like water to the lights above.

It starts as a prickle on my arms. Then I want to rub my eyes. They're gritty, like I haven't slept. Just as I'm thinking how weird that is, the pain kicks in. I gasp water.

I cough convulsively but there’s burning water in my airways. Needles drive through my skin, setting my nerves alight. Acid is eating me alive.

I'm the best swimmer in the state and I'm drowning.





Versus



Title: The Mortal Coil
Entry Nickname: Hero by Default
Word Count: 80K
Genre: Young Adult Urban Fantasy
Query:
When Covington Academy's basketball team is found comatose during practice, seventeen-year-old Aiden Milligan goes from top of the class to top of the suspect list. His extensive disciplinary record and recent altercation with the team's captain make Aiden the obvious culprit. Worse, his combination of brains, boredom, and bad attitude marks him as a possible member of The Orphion Circle, the rumored anarchist group being investigated by police. Guilty until proven innocent in the principal's eyes, Aiden knows he's one misstep from expulsion — or worse, a prison cell. Losing his academic future, the one thing that separates him from every other parentless screw-up, is not an option.

Teamwork is torture for Aiden, but classmate Jessie Rivas is his only help in clearing his name. A crackpot journalist determined to make her big break, Jessie drags Aiden into a mystifying investigation of the rising coma incidents around the city. When bloody symbols appear at the scene of one the attacks, Aiden begins to believe Jessie’s theories about the mysterious Orphion Circle are true. The Circle isn't an anarchist group. It's a coven of dangerous witches.

Stopping The Circle and clearing his name become one and the same for Aiden. A detective hounds his steps, though, hell-bent on locking him up. With every step of his investigation implicating him further, salvaging his reputation and his academic future may be impossible. But if he can't uncover the truth behind the mounting coma victims before The Circle silences him, he won't have a future at all.

First 250:

Aiden Milligan sat in the principal's office. Again. And for once, he wasn't sure why.

Aiden reviewed the usual complaints. No skipping classes — this week, anyway. Not like he couldn't afford to when he was so far ahead of the rest of the class.

No disrespecting any teachers. Correcting Ms. Maynard's electron assignment during Chemistry didn't count. Eye-rolls were reflexive at this point.

No refusing to cooperate with others. ...Okay, guilty as charged. But was that such a crisis?

"Mr. Milligan."

Aiden straightened up. Principal Hadley entered the office and sat behind his impenetrable oak desk.

"Sir," he muttered.

In the two years he’d attended the prestigious Covington Academy, Aiden and Principal Hadley had grown very familiar, in the way a lion gets familiar with a straggling wildebeest. Aiden was a problem that didn't want to be solved, and Hadley took that as a challenge.

Hadley ran a hand through thin, graying hair. “Thank you for coming, Aiden."

Aiden raised an eyebrow. Like he had a choice?

Here it comes. Slap on the wrist and hollow lecture. Then set me loose, 'cause you can't risk losing your highest GPA student. Rinse and repeat.

“To business.” Hadley folded his hands on his desk. "Last night, campus security found Coach Singer and the entire basketball team collapsed in the gym. The police were called in to investigate."

Police... Aiden's stomach twisted.

Hadley's eyes locked onto him. "They suspect foul play."

Foul play? Now his stomach plummeted somewhere around his feet. Damn, not good...

QK Round 3: Delicious Vicious Cycles vs Life as a Dumpster Fire

Title: VERA WITH A VENGEANCE
Entry Nickname: Delicious Vicious Cycles
Word Count: 74K
Genre: YA Contemporary (#ownvoices)

Query: 

When a car accident paralyzes Vera’s older brother and kills her parents, she's suddenly in charge of the medical bills, the mortgage, and her own anger and helplessness. Vera's always been good at getting back at people who hurt her, but she can’t exactly get revenge on the curve in the road where her father lost control of the car.

Meager insurance payouts leave Vera desperate for money, so she starts a business: when the traditional justice system fails her clients, Vera wrecks wrongdoers’ careers and cars, relationships and reputations. She revels in taking down racists and sexual assaulters, but her crush--her brother’s best friend--thinks her style of vengeance is morally wrong.

Then, while helping a client get payback for a leaked nude picture, Vera finds new evidence about her family’s “accident.” Turns out there is someone for Vera to blame, but the perpetrator had her own very good reason to seek vengeance.

Now Vera must decide whether getting even is worth getting blood on her hands.

First 250:

This creeper keeps staring at me with this little half smile, like he thinks I want his eyes undressing me. His face, all chin and cheekbones, reeks of always getting what he wants—women, money, free drinks in first class en route to Ibiza. I want to walk away, but his wife is shopping for an evening gown, and I need the commission to pay the energy bill.

I focus on her, and hold up a green dress to hide my body. “This would look great with your eyes.”

Her eyes are blue, but the green dress sells well, and if she buys it, I’ll hit the monthly quota for a higher commission percentage. I can only work so much after school, and I have to make the hours count.

She turns to Creeper. “What do you think?”

“I’d like to see more.” His eyes flicker down to my calves and back up to my chest. For all his wife can tell, he’s checking out the dress, but his gaze burns my skin.

I hold the dress higher to cover my chest and look at my boss for rescue. He mouths work it. If I didn’t need this job so badly…I force myself to smile.

Creeper’s gold smartwatch buzzes, and he glances away from me. Those watches cost three grand. Three grand would keep the lights on and pay for a month of the mortgage. Three grand could keep Levi and me from losing the house our parents raised us in.




Versus



Title: ORPHAN
Entry Nickname: Life as a Dumpster Fire
Word Count: 103K
Genre: Speculative Noir (#ownvoices)

Query:

Jeb knows there are only two kinds of family: the ones who leave you or the ones who own you. Each time he tries to escape the crime family who raised him is a strike against his life. The smartwatch implanted in his arm keeps count—three strikes and he's dead. Jeb already has two. When he gets his last, unexpected strike, he knows it’s over. Therefore, a federal agent offering him a way out of Felicity Harbour looks too good to be true. All he has to do is hand over the access codes to his boss’s technology empire. Except Jeb’s best friend, Booker, has the codes.

It isn’t just a matter of stealing information. Both orphans raised in the mob, Jeb and Booker have known each other since they were kids. But their relationship is complicated. Especially when they’re both more than a little in love with one another. Jeb has never told Booker that he loves him. Or, worse, how desperately he wants to leave Felicity Harbour.

Betraying Booker is unthinkable—until Booker betrays Jeb first.  Jeb is left with a choice between two futures: a swift end in a shallow grave, or becoming as brutal as the city he’s trying to leave behind.

First 250:

ERROR. Unable to open phone application. Please restart your device.

Jeb stabbed at the screen and the notification disappeared from view. He yanked open the taxi door and got out. His first step sank ankle-deep in a pothole pretending to be a puddle. Cold, dirty water flooded into his shoe and soaked the hem of his jeans.

“Damn it.” He sighed and shook his foot. The distant waves breaking against the waterfront laughed at him.

Jeb didn’t even have to be at the docks. Except Booker had asked for his company, and life was better when Booker was around.

A second notification appeared, this time scrolled across the screen embedded in Jeb’s contact lens. There is a problem with the system. Please restart your device. A cold wind grabbed Jeb’s nose as it passed—it smelled like misery and fear, and the corpse of Jeb’s childhood. He scrubbed a hand over his face. Then he restarted his device—the edges of the implanted screen burned hot against his wrist—and retried the phone call.

THIRD STRIKE PROTOCOL INITIATED flashed across the screen as the call went through.

Panic sent Jeb's stomach tumbling. He took a step back, already trying to calm himself down. He was still well within the territory borders. The system must have glitched.

But—

If it hadn't glitched, there was no way to know how he'd made Valin angry or how long Jeb would be punished before he was put down like a dog.

Booker picked up. “I'm getting old, man. Where the hell are you?”

QK Round 3: Super Powers and Problems vs Boy Band Ninja Assassins

Title: Engine of Change
Entry Nickname: Super Powers and Problems
Word Count: 100K
Genre: Adult Speculative Fiction

Query:

Seeing twenty-seven-year-old Jenna downing shots at the local dive bar, no one would guess she was once the feared supervillain Engine. That’s because everyone knows Engine is dead, just like the rest of the Specials–the superpowered teens who, ten years ago, tried to take over the world.
Or so the old manufactured headlines read. Jenna would say she and the others were trying to help.

Burdened with anger and guilt over being the last of her kind, all Jenna wants is to be left alone in the secret life she’s pieced together in New York City. That dream dies when the man who created the plague that eradicated the Specials threatens humanity with a new strain of the virus, and a government agency aware Jenna survived demands her help. Help she has no intention of providing until they blackmail her with the only thing that would change her mind: a promise to execute a handful of secretly-imprisoned surviving Specials.
Now Jenna must resurrect the leader she was and stop a madman from murdering billions. After enduring the genocide committed against her people, she’s not sure she can. Or should.

First 250:

The worst thing about having gained immortality at sixteen was being treated like a scamming teenager any time I wanted a fucking drink.

“ID,” Jimmy said as I climbed into the rust-red swivel seat at the middle of the bar. He leaned over the stained bar top and eyed me like I’d trailed dog shit in on my shoe.

I ripped open my wallet, nearly knocking over a half-empty glass of skunky swill someone had abandoned. “I’ve been in here a hundred times. Why are you still being a tool about this?”

Jimmy flicked his bald head up and to the right, at the fist-sized camera aimed at the bar. His engorged belly swung around under his blue sweat-soaked t-shirt. “Because I still don’t buy that you’re twenty-two, Jenna.”

He was right, I wasn’t twenty-two. I was twenty-seven, but got carded everywhere. I couldn’t even buy cigarettes without catching grief. Immunity to physical addiction was a nice perk to the whole doesn’t-age-or-get-sick thing, though. Take that, Philip Morris and Anheuser-Busch.

I yanked out my well-fabricated driver’s license and passed it over. Jimmy looked at it just long enough to satisfy a judge, and handed it back. “The usual? Beer and a bourbon shot?”

I nodded and jammed my ID back into my wallet.

The place was pretty empty; only three sad sacks scattered around, hunched in shadows, nursing their regrets. Of course it was a Tuesday at five PM and the place was a dump.



Versus



Title: LETH5L: DEEP CUTS
Entry Nickname: Boy Band Ninja Assassins
Word Count: 80K
Genre: YA Adventure Comedy

Query:

When Derrick Dominick and the other members of the world’s hottest boy band stumble into a coffee shop robbery in progress, they easily thwart the crooks with killer choreography. They didn’t name the band ‘Leth5l’ for nothing. Audiences, fangirl hearts, bad guys—they can slay just about anything thanks to their training for the Special Intelligence Network for Global Espionage, Recon and Security. (And dance class.)

Due to a misunderstanding with the barista, Derrick ends up in the back of a cop car. Roughly six seconds after he leaves the station, photos, videos, and internet rumors spread faster than a bullet leaving a gun. Consequently, Leth5l’s Manager/Handler sends two bloggers along on their next tour/mission to prove they’re just another boy band and Derrick’s not a criminal with a dimple.

Things get dicey when, to protect his cover, Derrick is forced to take a dangerous new drug called Rewind. It turns out that reliving the moment your biological mom abandoned you can sting just as much at seventeen-years-old as it did as a baby. Rewind, his butt, he’d rather erase that memory completely. Now, on top of his mission, and the two nosy (and hot!) bloggers up in his business, he’s got one mother of a mother issue to deal with before he makes a mistake that might be lethal (minus the five) to one of his bandmates.

At least his hair’s still on point.

First 250:

Five-part harmony is ridiculously hard in the morning. Especially before coffee. Yet, here we are, strolling out of W-IDK television station after singing our asses off at six-freaking-thirty A.M. on “Wake Up, Whichever-City-We’re-In!

They’re awake now.

I learned—foster situation number two, specifically—my dimple has that effect on people. Thank God it stayed with me beyond the chubby-cheek baby phase. I can wield it like a sword, but that’s only for my second job. Other times, like today, I use it to give the people what they want. Because giving the people what they want is the best part of my day. Even if it’s at an unholy hour.

Four steps outside the studio, Jay starts in on me. Again. “Do you think that you could, for once, turn your thousand-watt smile down some? How are the rest of us supposed to compete? That make-up chick was under my spell until you Derricked her to death.”

I dive into the backseat of the SUV with Leth5l-standard blacked out windows. Can’t let fangirls or bad guys know our location. Though, I’d totally be down if some of the fangirls knew. “I wasn’t aware that my name is a verb now. Good to know. How, exactly, does one Derrick somebody?”

Dash slides in next to me, his untied tie flapping around his neck. “Don’t act like you don’t know.”

“I have no clue what you’re talking about.”

Maybe that’s a bit of a lie. Lying is one of the things I do best; lying, and carrying lead vocals.

QK Round 3: Bounty and the Beast vs Switchers

Title: Dangerous Beasts
Entry Nickname: Bounty and the Beast
Word Count: 85,000
Genre: Adult Fantasy Romance

Query:

Exiled beast charmer Leena Edenfrell is in deep shit. Empty pockets force her to sell her beloved magical beasts on the black market—an offense punishable by death—and the Charmers Council hires a lethal assassin to exact punishment. With the realm’s most talented murderer-for-hire nipping at her heels, Leena makes him an offer he can’t refuse: a promise to procure a handful of mythical creatures in exchange for her life.

For assassin Noc, murder comes easy and pays well. But only fools pass up the chance to own rare and powerful magical beasts, even if that means lying to one enchanting charmer. Agreeing to Leena’s terms, Noc plans to keep the bounty live on her head until the creatures are his. Two paychecks, one job, no sleep lost.

To hunt for creatures, Noc and Leena embark on a quest across the countryside of Lendria. But traps capture more than beasts, and ensnared hearts are hard to untangle. Banished by the people she loved, Leena has no desire to take her heart out of exile, yet Noc is nothing like the monsters on the Council—or so she thinks. Bound by the magic of the assassin’s oath, Noc can’t renege on the contract for Leena’s head unless he’s willing to sacrifice his own. But neither can tame their growing feelings, and the ever-watchful Council demands blood. With Noc’s hands and heart tied, and Leena dodging enemies at every turn, no manner of beasts or money can protect their hides.

First 250:

By the time evening fell, three things were certain: the gelatinous chunks of lamb were absolute shit, my beady-eyed client was hankering for more than the beasts in my pocket, and I was being watched.

Two out of the three were normal for my after-hours dealings.

Sliding my meat to the side, I propped my elbows against the heavy plank table. My client lasted two seconds before his gaze roved to the book-shaped locket dangling in my cleavage. Wedging his thick fingers between his shirt collar and neck, he tugged gently on the fabric.

“You have what I came for?” Nasally and high-pitched, his voice grated along my skin. A businessman. A rare visitor in Midnight Jester, my preferred black market bar. My pocket hummed with the possibility of money, and I fingered the copper key hidden in my pants.

“Maybe.” I nudged the metal dinner plate farther away, and the gray meat jiggled. “How did you find me?” Dez, the bartender, sourced most of my clients, but a businessman? Neckties and Midnight Jester didn’t mingle. Shady with a side of grime, the regulars were as dirty as the floors. I shifted in the booth crammed against the shiplap wall, and the cracking black cushions creaked.

The unseen pair of eyes lingering in a dark recess of the bar burrowed further into the back of my head. Faint movement from the shadows flickered into my awareness. Movement that should have gone unnoticed, but I’d learned to be prepared for such things.



Versus



Title: The Switcher Chronicles
Entry Nickname: Switcher
Word Count: 96,000
Genre: Adult Urban Fantasy

Query:

Cade Hightower is a professional body switcher, paid to step into a client’s body and take his place in the dentist’s chair or at the in-laws’ dinner table. It’s a rare, well-paid skill—and the only one Cade has—so he’s willing take some risks to get the job done, including the ever-present danger of not getting his own body back. Cade takes all the precautions he can to keep his skin safe, no matter who’s wearing it, but there are no guarantees.

Cade and his older sister Daphne have drifted apart in the last ten years, but after a death in the family, she wants to repair the estrangement. Unfortunately, Cade still resents Daphne for putting ambition ahead of family. When he was thirteen, their mother got sick, their father ran off, and Daphne left him with his no-good uncle while she pursued her career in injectable magic. Now she claims she’s worried about his dangerous job, but where was she when he was a lonely, scared teenager who needed his big sister?

When a new client makes an unusual request—find out who’s swindling rich old people out of their fortunes and their lives—Cade goes undercover the way only a body switcher can. As he gets closer to the truth, Daphne worries Cade could get killed while Cade faces the danger he’s tried so hard to avoid—permanent body theft. Cade suspects the thief is someone Daphne loved and Cade hated, someone they both thought was dead. Convincing his sister he’s right could shatter their fragile relationship, and he doesn’t know if finding the truth—and finishing the job—are worth driving her away for good.

First 250:

I had been back in my body for twenty-four hours, and the mosquito bite between my shoulder blades itched like a rhino’s hide in a drought. The next time a client took my body camping while I did trust falls at a corporate retreat in his, I was going to add a bug-spray requirement to the contract.

But ignoring annoyances was part of my professional skill set, so I focused on getting the bus washed and ready for my next job, whatever that turned out to be. When the phone rang, I was balanced on an over-sized tire, squeegeeing the giant windshield. I jumped to the asphalt to take the call. The screen said, "Private Name Private Number." I got that a lot.

“Cade Hightower,” I said.

Harlan Ambrose’s voice on the line was deep and quick. “Cade, bro, what’re you doing?”

“Washing the bus, sir.”

“Hey, do me a favor and go inside. Got a job for you.”

I looked at the cracked asphalt under my feet. A high school parking lot on a Sunday was as private as the surface of the moon, but arguing with clients was bad for business. With a mental shrug, I climbed the three steps into the school bus I’d converted into my home. I settled in the swivel recliner anchored to the floor and put the phone back to my ear.

“I’m inside, sir. What’s this job?” My foot rattled against the floor. Ambrose was a good client, but talking to him on the phone gave me hives.

QK Round 3: From Gutters to Galleries vs Mother of All Custody Battles

Title: Only When I Fall
Entry Nickname: From Gutters to Galleries
Word Count: 80K
Genre: Upmarket Fiction

Query:

If she could find a better paying job than the Museum of Fine Arts café, Mia Clarke wouldn't have to keep selling heroin. As a single mom, it kills her to contribute to people's afflictions—especially Tris, her former partner in both love and graffiti art. When he stops by the café for a couple of grams and accidentally leaves behind a gorgeous painting, Mia anonymously enters it into an online art contest hoping to help him turn his life around.

Soon, the image goes viral, sparking a widespread search for a troubled loner with a singular gift. But not everyone searching for Tris means him well. A posh art dealer with a trail of disappearing protégés, a social network moderator obsessed with the anonymous contest entry, and a groundskeeper required to evict the homeless are all closing in on the abandoned utility room under a Charles River bridge where Tris has been staying.

Unaware of the pursuers closing in, Tris must shake the heroin in his veins and leave his old life behind or risk losing not only his life's work and the person he loves, but the very life to which he clings. While Mia, weighed down by her guilt over being both Tris's dealer and the one person who can help him find the recognition his talent deserves, vows to quit selling drugs and to fight to save the man she wishes she didn't love—for herself, for him, and for the daughter he never knew he had.

First 250:

The Museum of Fine Arts was humming. Patrons clopped around on marble tile toward the new Vermeer exhibit, loners sketched landscapes in their spiral pads, and tour guides directed groups between potted ferns from the European galleries to the Americas. An odd tang of coffee and parmesan wafted from the café on the first floor.

Mia Clarke wiped down table five, the edge of her full-sleeve tattoos peeking out from beneath the black uniform shirt cuffs buttoned at her wrists. She brushed a strand of pink hair behind her ear. As she rushed to take an order from a customer at the next table over, a different kind of customer stepped into the café.

She saw him out of the corner of her eye. He was hard to miss.

His dirty blonde hair was matted and fell past his shoulders like a neglected houseplant, its tendrils winding their way through his overgrown beard. Glancing around the room, he found an empty chair and slid into it. Their eyes met.

Finishing up with her customer, Mia closed her pad and wound her way through the maze of tables before stopping at his.

"Hey, Tris. Can I get you a cup of coffee?"

He sat hunched over the table, his eyes unreadable. "No thanks. Just a fruit cup."

A thin sigh escaped her lips. "How about a muffin or something?"

"Not today."


She knew he didn't care about the fruit. He came for the heroin she slipped inside.




Versus



Title: FINDING SETH
Entry Nickname: Mother of All Custody Battles
Word Count: 73K
Genre: Women’s Fiction

Query:

Lola Bishop has been to the end of her rope so many times she’s not sure she has enough antidepressants to keep her from tying it into a noose and slipping it around her neck. All she wants is to have a baby and raise a family with her husband, Paul. But their premature son doesn’t make it, and an emergency hysterectomy kills any future dreams of motherhood. More dark days follow in the form of depression and divorce papers. Then she discovers not only has Paul moved in with his young girlfriend, Iris, they’re also expecting a baby – a little boy they name Seth.

But Lola’s got to pull her act together when a car crash kills Paul and Iris and orphans Seth – now a toddler. Iris’s will has some glaring holes, but Paul’s will clearly names Lola as Seth’s guardian. At the same time Iris’s dad, who’s been caring for Seth since the accident, starts building his legal case to contest Paul’s will, Lola ponders whether she’s strong enough to raise the child her ex-husband had with his girlfriend. Steeling her heart, Lola jumps into the legal ring as she and Isaac try to outmaneuver each other in the mother of all custody battles.

First 250:

It was the receptionist at my gynecologist’s office who clued me in that something major was afoot. Not that she said anything in particular – of course she can’t say anything. Medical privacy laws and all. But there’s no privacy law that prohibits a weird, high-pitched tone when calling my name, or an uncomfortable shiftiness palpable across the sliding glass divider.

No, there was no one in the office who said anything during my checkup. But my nurse gave me several odd, sideways glances. And Dr. Marta, the obstetrician who’d walked me through days darker than death, made a telling comment on my way out of the office. As she put her cool, clinical hand on my shoulder, she held it a beat longer than normal and asked: “How’s your friend Brenda these days?”

Brenda Gillis – one of my dearest friends on earth, despite all the crap I’ve put her through – has an uncanny knack for knowing exactly what’s going on in the lives of everyone in Glenhaven without being a busybody. While she flirts with the line of being a gossip, there’s no malice in her methods. Less paparazzi, more society columnist.

I called her immediately from my car. “Where are you?” I asked. “I just left Dr. Marta’s. Her whole staff was acting weird.”

Brenda sighed on the other end. “I’m taking the kiddos to Noodles before their piano lessons,” she said. “Do you want to meet me there? We need to talk.”

Jun 17, 2017

Query Kombat Round 3 Match Ups




Round three is coming up in just a few days. The round starts on June 20th at 8:00 a.m. and continues until June 22nd at 8:00 p.m. EDT.
 
Round three will be hosted only on Mike's blog. If you have any questions, comments, or concerns, please leave a comment or tweet us: @ravenousrushing @michelle4laughs @lh_writes.

Round 3 Match Ups


Bounty and the Beast  v  Switcher

Mother of All Custody Battles v   From Gutters to Galleries

Super Powers and Problems  v  Boy Band Ninja Assassins

Delicious Vicious Cycles  v  Life as a Dumpster Fire

Book Boys Gone Wild v  Nowhere Land 

Girl of Your Nightmares  v  Alabama Witch Hunters

This Selkie Can't Swim v   Hero by Default

Perfectly Imperfect Princess v   Be Grateful for Cookies


Good Luck Sweet 16 Kombatants!




Jun 12, 2017

QK Agent Round Wrap Up & Round 2 Match Ups


The Agent Round of Query Kombat 2017 has come to a close with a grand total of 124 requests spread across 35 entries.




I'd like to give a HUGE thanks to all the agents who came out to help make the Agent Round a success. And thanks to the Judges who whipped our Kombatants into shape!

Below are Agent Round stats we figured would get you riled up for Round 2. If you keep reading, you might even find Round 2 Match Ups.

Remember, only sixteen of you will advance. Good luck Kombatants, and good luck Judges. Both groups have a tough road ahead.




Agent Round Stats:

Highest number of requests for an entry: 14
Most requested host: Mike
Total number of Wild Cards played: 17


Below you will find Round 2 match-ups.  The round starts on June 14 at 8:00 a.m. and continues until June 16 at 8:00 p.m. EDT.
 
Round two will be hosted on Laura's blog and Michelle's blog. If you have any questions, comments, or concerns, please leave a comment or tweet us: @ravenousrushing @michelle4laughs @lh_writes.

Round 2 Match Ups

Laura's Blog  
From Gutters to Galleries vs. Stands By Until He Doesn't  
The Nose Knows vs. Life as a Dumpster Fire
Alternative Facts vs. Boy Band Ninja Assassins
Book Boys Gone Wild vs. he Half-Orphan's Handbook
This Selkie Can't Swim vs. We Kinda Destroyed Paris
Hero by Default vs. Kaza  
Be Grateful for Cookies vs. Dogs and Chickens and Dragons, Oh My!  
Alabama With Hunters vs. Super Space Nerd
 
Michelle's Blog  
Bounty and the Beast vs. Beards   
Three Men and an Actuary vs. Mother of All Custody Battles  
I Fell for a Convicted Felon vs. Delicious Vicious Cycles  
Switcher vs. The Barringer Museum   
Super Powers and Problems vs. Asteroid Snacks
Cheshire Hearts Alice vs. Girl of Your Nightmares
Estella + Ayron  vs. Nowhere Land Bust the Bubble Wrap vs. Perfectly Imperfect Princess

Good Luck Kombatants!

Jun 7, 2017

The Query Kombat Agent Round Begins!

Here we go! The agent round! Before you dive in, please - agents and entrants - read this post!

QK Agent Round - Bounty and the Beast

Title: Dangerous Beasts
Entry Nickname: Bounty and the Beast
Word Count: 85K
Genre: Adult Fantasy Romance

QK Agent Round - The Barringer Museum

Title: We, Freaks
Entry Nickname: The Barringer Museum
Word count: 78K
Genre: Adult Speculative Fiction

QK Agent Round - Super Powers and Problems

Title: Engine of Change
Entry Nickname: Super Powers and Problems
Word Count: 100K
Genre: Adult SciFi

QK Agent Round - Mother of All Custody Battles

Title: FINDING SETH
Entry Nickname: Mother of All Custody Battles
Word Count: 73K
Genre: Women’s Fiction

QK Agent Round - Life as a Dumpster Fire

Title: ORPHAN
Entry Nickname: Life as a Dumpster Fire
Word Count: 103K
Genre: Speculative Noir (#ownvoices)

QK Agent Round - I Fell for a Convicted Felon

Title: Unreasonable Doubts
Entry Nickname: I Fell for a Convicted Felon
Word Count: 91K
Genre: Contemporary Women's Fiction

QK Agent Round - Super Space Nerd

Title: The Adventures of Kirby Daring
Entry Nickname: Super Space Nerd
Word Count: 35K
Genre: MG Science Fiction

QK Agent Round - Kaza

Title: The Tsar's Heir
Nickname: Kaza
Word count: 110K
Genre: YA fantasy

QK Agent Round - Girl of Your Nightmares

Title: Lucid
Entry Nickname: Girl of Your Nightmares
Word Count: 93K
Genre: YA Psychological Suspense (ownvoices)

QK Agent Round - ESTELLA+AYRON

Title: Secrets in the Stone
Entry Nickname: ESTELLA+AYRON
Word Count: 77K
Genre: YA Historical Fiction

QK Agent Round - Girl Takes Back the White House

Title: The Last First Daughter
Entry Nickname: Girl Takes Back the White House
Word Count: 97K
Genre: YA Adventure, Retelling

Jun 5, 2017

Query Kombat Round 1 Wrap Up

This is a list of the winners from this blog only. These winners had their first round matchups on this blog.
 

Bust the Bubble Wrap
Dogs and Chickens and Dragons, Oh My!
Perfectly Imperfect Princess

This Selkie Can't Swim
We Kinda Destroyed Paris
Book Boys Gone Wild

The Half-Orphan's Handbook
Cheshire Alice

The Barringer Museum
Beards

Congrats! Please return your revised entry for the agent round by 8:00 am on Tuesday. Use the exact same format and the contest email address. You may put REVISED in your subject line.

Winning on this blog does not mean you will assigned here for the agent round. 

I hope the feedback from judges and contestants is helpful to everyone! Best of luck to all!

Jun 2, 2017

Query Kombat Round 1 Begins!


Get that thick skin in place because here we go! Round 1

Hop on over to Laura's and Michelle's blogs to see the rest of the match-ups and entries! They are spread all over the place. Some here, some there. We've got a little bit of everything: Adult/NA, YA, and MG! This round lasts until June 5th at 8 pm.


On the last day the hosts will call out for extra judges to come and break ties, or in case of extra close votes to try and get a more decisive margin. In the event a tie remains, the blog host will provide the tie breaker. The entry with the most votes for Victory moves forward to the agent round on June 7th! Kombatants will have a chance to revise at that time.  Hosts will also pick one eliminated entry to "save" that will be featured in the agent round but not move ahead to Round 2.

Winning entries must be revised and returned to QueryKombat (at) gmail (dot) com by Monday, June 6th at 8:00 am Eastern. Follow the exact same format in the original post. If you don't submit a revised entry by 8am, we'll post the original in the agent round.

Now before we begin:


Read this post again to remind yourselves of the rules and guidelines of commenting and judging. Below I've reposted the main ideas:

Reminders for the Entrants:


You may comment on your own entries after voting has ended to offer thanks or congrats. Do not otherwise respond to or explain feedback. If there is a problem with your entry, shout out to us on twitter as soon as you can. (@LH_Writes - I'm usually online in the mornings) If you don't have Twitter, you may comment on your entry telling us the mistake. Also, we tried our hardest to make the match-ups as fair as possible and against as similar stories as possible. But, obviously, this is impossible to do perfectly and some match-ups may seen very random. We apologize for this but it's an evil of the system.


Kombatants should comment on 6 other match-ups to help share the love around! But Kombatants do not cast votes. Please do not comment until after the blog host leaves a comment for the judge votes.

Reminders for the Judges:


Wait until after one of us hosts comments on each entry first and reply to that comment to cast your votes. Try making your votes objective instead of subjective (but if you really love an entry subjectively, don't even feel bad about saying it was a subjective vote - subjectivity rules!). Be sure to point out the good as well as what needs work. Post under your nicknames! If you forget, just delete and repost. And judges: seriously, thank you for doing this. It's a very tough job and isn't for the faint-hearted.

Reminders for Everyone:


Try not to comment until after one of us hosts have made the first comment, then go ahead and offer your feedback. We ask everyone who entered Query Kombat to leave at least one comment. 


NOW THE FUN BEGINS!!! GO GO GO!!! We'll be Tweeting under #QueryKombat! 
And may the odds be ever in your favor!

QK Round 1: Perfectly Imperfect Princess vs Monsters Are Real

Title: Penelope Charming and the Poisoned Glass Slippers
Entry Nickname: Perfectly Imperfect Princess
Word count: 53K
Genre: Middle Grade Fantasy

Query:

Twelve-year-old Princess Penelope, daughter of Cinderella, has a “charmed life.” Closets full of ruffly dresses (itchy), classes at the prestigious Charming Academy (boring), and her very own fairy godmother (annoying). Penelope would trade them all for her mother’s signature on an adventure slip to travel outside the castle walls. Too bad Cinderella refuses to sign.

Exploring secret passages and games of capture-the-frog are fun, but when a rival princess dares Penelope to steal her mother’s glass slippers, her craving for adventure results in shattered shoes days before the annual ball. Smashed slippers are small peas to Penelope, but to a villain plotting the end to her mother’s Happily Ever After, it’s a perfectly twisted opportunity. The replacement glass slippers are poisoned, casting her mother into a deathly slumber.

Feeling guilty, Penelope searches for the origin of the mysterious poison and discovers a giant’s bite shares the same symptoms. Once upon a time, an antidote to giant venom existed. Lucky for Penelope, her new friend Jack may know where to find it. With Jack’s promise to guide them, Penelope and her best friend, Red, sneak out of the castle walls to venture to the forbidden Beanstalk Forest. Penelope’s wish for adventure becomes a race to find the antidote ingredients to wake her mother before she sleeps forever after.

First 250:

Once upon a time, a princess ventured through the wilds of Fablewood…

I shoved my slingshot through my sash and dropped to the mud, peering through the rose bush. A small frog stretched out on the edge of the wishing well, belly up to the sun. His skin gleamed greener than all the plants in the garden, for this was no ordinary frog. I squeezed under the bush, but a thorn snagged the frilly hem of my dress, tearing the fabric with a loud rip. I froze.

The frog stretched his scrawny arms, wiggled a teeny bit, but his arms flopped back onto the stones. He hadn't heard me. The frog was miiine.

The brave princess had climbed tall towers, outrun villains, trudged through swamps…

Squelching stealthily through the mushy mud, I crawled to the well and paused.

One happily ever after...two happily ever after...three happily ever after.

She was Princess Penelope, daughter of Cinderella. One little frog was no match for her.

“Surrender!” I sprung to my feet. A frog-shaped puddle sparkled on the stones. The water at the bottom of the well remained calm. “Rotten peas!”

Something sharp poked my cheek.

“Gotcha, Princess Penelope!”

 “Phib! When did you know I was coming?" I glared into the frog's scum-colored googley eyes.

 “I saw you leave the castle doors.” Phib flourished the twig he'd poked me with like a fencing sword, bowed, and settled down, belly up to the sun once again. The dank smell of algae mixed with jasmine tickled my nose: eau de Phib.




V.



Title: NOTHER LAND
Entry Nickname: Monsters are real.
Word count: 52K
Genre: MG Historical fantasy

Query:

Evacuated to an island off the coast of England during World War II, Alice promises to take care of her seven-year-old brother, Edwin. With their close bond, it’s an easy promise to make, but a harder one to keep, especially when she’s powerless to protect Edwin from the creepy housemaster’s attention. Coupled with severe homesickness and Mother failing to show for a visit, Alice plans an escape. But when she loses control of their getaway boat, Edwin is swept away. As she battles to reach him she sees someone carrying him from the water; someone only she saw.

Alice is convinced that Luna Mara—the so-called mythological child snatcher—has taken her brother. Wracked with guilt and determined to find Edwin, she crosses paths with Ruby, sworn enemy and class bully, who's also searching for missing family. In a moment of unintentional partnership they discover Nother Land, a place where all lost things go, and together they cross the threshold. Conflicted, the troubled pair separate and Alice is confronted with a choice: to abandon her life and stay with Edwin in a fantasy world, or risk becoming part of Nother Land’s lost to discover the truth behind her brother’s disappearance.
 
250 words:

The whistle screamed a warning through the station. Steam blasted from the locomotive’s engine as it hissed to life with a long sigh. My heart echoed the heavy chug-chug-chug of the train gathering pace, leaving King’s Cross behind in a blanket of fog. Away from the bombs. Away from home. Away from Mother, waving her white hanky from the platform edge.

I couldn’t see her anymore for the curtain of mist, but I kept my cheek pressed against the glass. My little brother, Edwin, couldn’t see me cry. No one could—especially not the classmates sharing my compartment. First time away from home and branded a cry baby? No, thank you. Besides, Mother said I had to be brave. I squeezed Purrl, the beanbag cat hidden under my grey school blazer, until my breath stilled.

I leant back against the rough fabric and my polished shoes shot out, my legs being too short to bend around the edge of the seat. I shuffled down an inch and my feet hung like the redhead’s in the opposite corner. Across from me, my little brother knelt facing backwards, his face still glued to the window, his breath fogging up the glass. Unruly black hair sprouted like a carrot top at his crown, despite Mother’s attempts to plaster it down with Vaseline. Next to him sat the silver-haired housemaster, Dr. Dickerson, grinding his jaw backwards and forwards. Edwin and I had known him for all of three minutes, and I already didn’t like him.

QK Round 1: Dogs and Chickens and Dragons vs Wolf in Witch Clothing

Title: Flecka Wivern and Her Two Pet Dragons
Entry Nickname: Dogs and Chickens and Dragons, Oh My!
Word count: 42K
Genre: MG Contemporary Fantasy

Query:

12-year-old Flecka Wivern is happy living a secret life as a Magical in rural Pennsylvania, even though her closest friends are her five chickens, one dog and two pet dragons. All that changes, however, when wicked little creatures from another realm called Vitterdam open a portal to Earth and kidnap her six-year-old brother Felix.

Flecka doesn’t know why anyone would want her smelly and loud little brother, but she doesn’t care--he’s her smelly and loud little brother. Now Flecka, with the help of her dragons and her non-magical (and only human) friend Darrell, must face magicked monsters and school bullies to reopen the portal. But once they open the portal, their true adventure begins--the wicked little creatures who kidnapped Felix work for Almerich, an evil sorcerer who wants to take over Vitterdam and who mysteriously believes that Felix will help him do so. Now Flecka, Darrell and her two dragons must use all the magical and non-magical tricks they have to not only save Felix, but also to save all of Vitterdam from Almerich’s clutches.

First 250:

Flecka didn't want to do her morning chores. But she had begged her mom for the chickens, and her mom had agreed provided that Flecka would be the one to take care of them.

"Your chickens, your responsibility," her mom had said, talking over the din of Felix crashing his toy trucks into the coffee table. "And if you get them to the point where their eggs hatch, then those are your responsibility too."

Flecka had agreed like any short-sighted twelve-year-old would. She loved chickens almost as much as she loved dragons.

But her love for both were flagging this muddy morning, which also happened to be the first day of fall. Which also happened to be Vitterdam Day.

Her sneakers slurped through the mucky ground as she tromped to the chicken coop to let her flock out on the wet grass. She was glad it was so damp; wet grass meant she would have to put out less fires. Wet grass meant that she would have less chores to do.

The smell of straw and droppings welcomed her as she opened the squeaky wooden door to the coop. She wrinkled her nose as she did a headcount of her flock: five purple and pink-feathered hens and two rainbow-scaled and red-horned dragons.

"Come on now," she coaxed as she held the coop door open. "I'm not going to wait forever. Now shoo!"

Her chickens clucked and trotted out, startled by Flecka's cry. Her dragons, however, did little more than give Flecka bored serpentine stares.



V.


Title: A Tale of Witches and Wolves
Entry Nickname: Wolf in Witch Clothing
Word count: 49K
Genre: MG Fantasy

Query:

For Nata, life as a wolf in the forest is walking the line between being shot by human hunters on the one side and being cursed by witches on the other. Her only hope is to find a place for her family, especially her little brother Lev, where they can live without fear of being hunted.

But then a hunter shoots Lev. Her brother is clinging to life, and the only one who can save him is the witch Baba Yaga, who live deeps in the forest in a hut balanced on chicken legs. But going to a witch for help is one thing no wolf should ever do—a witch’s curse can make a wolf lose herself and turn against her pack.

To save her brother, Nata will have to risk a curse that will cause her to betray her family, and lose her soul.

First 250:

Nata pressed her nose to the ground and sniffed. Among the smells of moss and fallen leaves, there was the stink of rotten meat and decay that almost always marked magic. It was faint, meaning she hadn’t strayed too far into dangerous territory, but not so faint that Nata would risk going any farther.

The fur on her back stood on end. As a wolf in the forest, she couldn’t help but feel on edge. The smell of magic meant that a witch was close by, and witches were to be avoided at all costs.

She crept away from the stench, retracing her steps through a grove of spiky pine trees. Even though the smell had been faint, it still clung to her fur. Disgusting. The stink didn’t disappear fully until she reached the far side of the hill. She gulped down the clean air, breathing out her nose in sharp huffs, trying to clear out any traces of the scent. After resting a moment, she touched her nose to the ground again, and set off in a different direction, carving her way between trees and boulders.

She’d been doing this for months—weaving her way through the woods, running into the smell of a witch, retreating and starting down a new path. Deep inside her, clinging to her bones like moss on stone, was the belief that there was a place in the forest far away from danger. That if she could just find a safe passage, she and her family could go there and live without fear.

QK Round 1: Bust the Bubble Wrap vs Putt-Putt Pro

Title: Super Weenie
Entry Name: Bust the Bubble Wrap
Word count: 48,000
Genre:  MG Contemporary (#OwnVoices)

Query:

Eleven-year-old Saffron Lewis wants to be a regular kid, but her life-threatening food allergies, medical alert bracelet and ever-present EpiPen make her feel like a weirdo. Her hyper-protective mother has managed to keep her safe so far. But to Saffy, the rules, regulations and restrictions feel like bubble wrap. And she’s ready to burst free.

Saffy's starting middle school, and she's got a plan: Pretend to be Perfectly Normal.

Everything goes fine… until she eats a bite of supposedly safe cookie during a class party and goes into anaphylactic shock. She jolts awake in an ambulance. Time for a new plan: Survive Sixth Grade.

As if her own malfunctioning body isn't enough of a challenge, Saffy's got a brand new nemesis, too. Her locker mate Madison has devoted herself to making Saffy’s life totally un-fun. She calls Saffy Nut Girl, labels her defective, and tricks everyone into thinking Saffy's having another allergic reaction just to freak out Saffy's friends and entertain her own.

Making matters worse, Saffy’s mother demands the school enact a restrictive food policy to protect her daughter. The School Board gets involved. Before long there are protestors waving picket signs in front of her school.

What Saffy really wants is a superhero to swoop in and save the day. But the closest she’s got is her own despised alter ego, Super Weenie, assigned by her older brother after her first allergic reaction.

Somehow, Saffy must defeat Madison and her squadron of mean girls, defuse her mom's bubble-wrap-style restrictions, and dodge the EpiPen-wielding school nurse. With no other superheroes on the horizon, Saffy realizes there's no way to escape the cape. She'll just have to become her own superhero.

First 250:

Uh-oh. Here comes my mom. I bet she's busted out the jumbo-sized roll of bubble wrap.

The click-clack of her high-heeled shoes stops outside my bedroom door. She holds her arms wide for a hug. I squeeze her harder than normal, trying to de-activate the army of tiny robots stampeding in my belly. It doesn't work. I'm still nervous.

"Have a great first day." She tugs the tip of my braid out of my mouth.

"I will.”

"You've got your inhaler?"

"Yes, Mom. I showed you last night." Sigh.

"Okay. Dad will deliver your EpiPen to the nurse this morning." She straightens my shirt collar.

"Yep. I know. Since you're convinced I can't take care of myself." Now the robots are testing their rocket boosters.

"Please don't start, Saffron." Her hands flutter down to my wrists. "Where's your medical alert bracelet?"

"Just putting it on." I tuck it under my sleeve.

"You have to wear it every day."

"Mom! Stop worrying.”

"Fine. Say 'hi' to Britt and Jessica. I told them to watch out for you.”

"You've convinced my friends to spy on me?" I administer a megawatt glare and yank on my braid. Its tip is spit-soaked from when I was chewing on it earlier. Blech.

Dad sidles up. His daily fashion disaster is a bright pink shirt. Yeesh. Between regular first-day-of-school worries and mom's nervous breakdown over my allergies, I don't have time to help Dad with his latest clothing misfire. I can't even joke with Mom about it because I'm busy being irritated at her.



V.


Title: Scratch
Entry Nickname: Putt-Putt Pro
Word count: 55K
Genre: MG Contemporary

Query:

Twelve-year-old Win Moore lives and breathes mini-golf, but his ultimate dream is to ditch the putter and master “real” golf at an exclusive, local country club. Short in stature and low on cash, Win scores a summer caddying job that turns from dream to nightmare when he’s fired by the country club’s snobby president.

But Win gets a second chance when the country club’s greenskeeper, Mr. Boozer, a disgraced ex-professional golfer, hires him as his summer assistant. With his sights set on the annual Junior Club Championship, Win convinces Mr. Boozer to help him go from chump to champ.

Skeptical of Mr. Boozer’s peculiar teaching strategies, Win thinks the wacky lessons are a waste of time. But if Win will give Mr. Boozer's coaching a chance, he’ll learn that being short and poor isn’t the end of the world and that every shot counts.

First 250:

Ladies and gentlemen, it all comes down to this putt.

I looked down at my golf ball, licked my lips, and squeezed the grip on my putter.

If he makes this putt, Win Moore, the pint-sized 7th grader, will become the youngest champion in golf history. The crowd hushes as Win stands over his ball.


I cleared my mind, pulled back the putter in one smooth motion, and tapped the ball. PING. It shot toward the hole 25 feet away.

And the putt is away. Moving a little left-to-right. This ball has a shot.

I loosened my grip and leaned to the right—willing the ball to move in that direction.

Win Moore likes his putt. But does it have enough speed?

“Come on. Get legs,” I mumbled.

Almost there. It’s not going to make it.

The ball slowed, froze on the edge of the hole, and debated whether to move another fraction of an inch and fall in the cup. “Drop,” I whispered. Nothing. Then the ball shifted and slid in the cup—CLINK.

It’s in the hole! He made it, ladies and gentlemen! Win Moore has won the championship!

I jabbed my putter to the sky, snatched the ball from the hole, and gave it a big, wet kiss.

“Hey, kid? Are you done yet?” a voice from behind asked. “My kids want to play mini-golf too.”

I spun around mid-celebration, mouth planted on a neon-pink golf ball, and snapped back into the real world.