tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3034511096795820355.post8512220701286862743..comments2023-09-14T17:10:53.917-04:00Comments on Writer's Outworld: Query Critique: PRIMEMichaelhttp://www.blogger.com/profile/05934646615884109998noreply@blogger.comBlogger4125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3034511096795820355.post-87107585662773506942013-11-30T12:30:44.211-05:002013-11-30T12:30:44.211-05:00Okay, this comment for pending for too long. This ...Okay, this comment for pending for too long. This sounds like a great story. No wonder you were in NOQS :)<br />Good luck.Anonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/02107550063893335107noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3034511096795820355.post-2033368742592219312013-11-25T14:32:45.971-05:002013-11-25T14:32:45.971-05:00This is a really interesting story and concept and...This is a really interesting story and concept and Mike did make some great suggestions. <br /><br />The only thing I'd add is that comparing your story to two classics, Brave New World and Frankenstein, isn't helping you. Agents want modern comp titles. It shows you know your marketplace and what works today. Comparing your book to two old classics doesn't accomplish either. Kimhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/12387192455675819898noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3034511096795820355.post-82113479631736282552013-11-25T14:08:24.890-05:002013-11-25T14:08:24.890-05:00Mike made some great suggestions, and I don't ...Mike made some great suggestions, and I don't have much to add except that I would totally love to read this! I hope I hear about it hitting the shelves soon.GSMarlenehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/17558162486383585621noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3034511096795820355.post-61725904895213312972013-11-25T06:15:51.291-05:002013-11-25T06:15:51.291-05:00Thank you Mike. I am terrible with tense issues. W...Thank you Mike. I am terrible with tense issues. When I think I've got it right I usually need at least two more sets of eyes before I get it clean. Sheesh. Thanks for all your ideas here. Great feedback. Will keep you posted :) Writefully Sohttps://www.blogger.com/profile/16761211073195336714noreply@blogger.com