tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3034511096795820355.post5865590457636319686..comments2023-09-14T17:10:53.917-04:00Comments on Writer's Outworld: Qk Round 4: A Cozy for Geeks VS Lavender MarriageMichaelhttp://www.blogger.com/profile/05934646615884109998noreply@blogger.comBlogger21125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3034511096795820355.post-88897619817223162702014-06-26T19:47:22.761-04:002014-06-26T19:47:22.761-04:00I love the historical research behind Lavender Mar...I love the historical research behind Lavender Marriage, but I can't get the voice for Cozy for Geeks out of my head -- so engaging and funny! <br /><br />VICTORY TO COZY FOR GEEKSMrs. Malcolm Reynoldsnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3034511096795820355.post-52302585743936365602014-06-26T14:14:36.161-04:002014-06-26T14:14:36.161-04:00I remember A Cozy for Geeks from an earlier round ...I remember A Cozy for Geeks from an earlier round and I still love it! In fact, it's better.<br />Lavender Marriage is an interesting concept, and I love historical fiction!<br />But I will have to give <br />Victory to A Cozy for Geeks.The Hybridnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3034511096795820355.post-78698389980876028042014-06-25T21:38:10.452-04:002014-06-25T21:38:10.452-04:00Ugh. These are so good. And so different. And WHY ...Ugh. These are so good. And so different. And WHY DO I HAVE TO CHOOSE???<br /><br />Sigh. I just have to go with personal preference here, and it's voice that gets me every time.<br /><br />Victory to A COZY FOR GEEKS.Captain YAWPnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3034511096795820355.post-63604156000998811902014-06-25T20:42:03.583-04:002014-06-25T20:42:03.583-04:00Both of these entries are incredible. I love the w...Both of these entries are incredible. I love the whole tabloids scandal aspect of LAVENDER MARRIAGE and I think the tweaks to the query have just made this entry stronger. A COZY FOR GEEKS has a voice that I just can't get out of my head and feels like something I'd pick up. This is super close but...<br /><br />VICTORY TO A COZY FOR GEEKS.Papercutsnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3034511096795820355.post-68590475867751166222014-06-25T19:01:51.810-04:002014-06-25T19:01:51.810-04:00Guest Judge Green Velvet here. Sorry I can't g...Guest Judge Green Velvet here. Sorry I can't give lengthy feedback, I'm making do technologically speaking and having all kinds of problems. Victory to COZY FOR GEEKS, even though I'm not a cozy-reader, your voice and humor really drew me in and I got a great sense of your narrator from the beginning. I felt kind of confused by things like "artificially conceived children" in LAVENDER MARRIAGE and the character descriptions in the query didn't give me enough sense of who these people were other than being clandestinely gay and at risk because of it.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3034511096795820355.post-90803620307562454252014-06-25T16:20:46.462-04:002014-06-25T16:20:46.462-04:00Go Cozy For Geeks! #writerbees represent!Go Cozy For Geeks! #writerbees represent!Mallorynoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3034511096795820355.post-45857383057549814862014-06-25T16:09:32.645-04:002014-06-25T16:09:32.645-04:00Both of these are great entries for different reas...Both of these are great entries for different reason. GEEKS is funny with a good voice and LAVENDER is romantic with a thoroughly intriguing concept. Since I fell in love with it from round 1...<br /><br />Victory to LAVENDER MARRIAGEGirl with the Golden Pennoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3034511096795820355.post-26464599965887154262014-06-25T15:31:08.320-04:002014-06-25T15:31:08.320-04:00These seem so different, but that's how it goe...These seem so different, but that's how it goes now. So onwards and funwards, eh?<br /><br />A COZY FOR GEEKS<br />I kind of get the different tense in the first paragraph. I mean its set-up and all. But I also kind of don't. It reads just fine without it. In the moment yes, he is drunk, and even after all of that, she'll still have no experience. But your voice is strong and everything clips right along. I'd be hard-pressed to find any issues with it that aren't subjective. So I'll say that, if you're not getting any requests in this thing or querying, then its probably subjective. You're doing great. Sidenote: have you ever tried to hurt someone with a 3-D printed part? Not sure it could be that sharp...well I suppose if you filed it. But that would have to be a HUGE 3d printer...unless it was just the head, and then you added things. 3D printers are expensive (I own one in case you couldn't tell). I know this is random and side-notey but I'm a judge so you have to humor me. :D The power is going to my head, I can tell. Anyways, I imagine I need to read more. Which would be lovely. :D<br /><br />LAVENDER MARRIAGE well isn't this just such an intriguing premise. I see your research already in the query and 250. Not that I know a ton about this time period, but more that I used the mighty google to see if they even artificially inseminated back then. And they did! It was new, but there you go! Well, you probably already knew that. So I'm impressed. You have a delightful little meet-cute there, though it gives me pause as if this is a prologue. And is it necessary. Not enough to say no, but enough to see how committed I am, which you'll learn soon enough.<br /><br />VICTORY TO LAVENDER MARRIAGE because the market is looking for more stories like this one, not because Cozy for geeks is bad in any way. (I promise it has nothing to do with my 3-D printer rant)Sprocketnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3034511096795820355.post-13368933613197056072014-06-25T14:56:20.442-04:002014-06-25T14:56:20.442-04:00Premise for both of these is fantastic and so diff...Premise for both of these is fantastic and so different. But I'm still won by the voice in Cozy's first 250.<br /><br />I give VICTORY to A COZY FOR GEEKS.Glen Coconoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3034511096795820355.post-41443745884633269942014-06-25T13:53:47.008-04:002014-06-25T13:53:47.008-04:00They are both great. Merely subjective at this poi...They are both great. Merely subjective at this point.<br /><br />Victory to A COZY FOR GEEKS.Pen Dreamernoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3034511096795820355.post-74152772266159738342014-06-25T13:11:21.387-04:002014-06-25T13:11:21.387-04:00Wow! I haven't seen either of these before and...Wow! I haven't seen either of these before and was blown away by both. I will say the query for Lavender Marriage drew me in more than the query for A Cozy. BUT I adored the 250 for A Cozy. I mean, a bubble pipe? Yes, please.<br /><br />Great job both of you. <br /><br />Victory to A COZY FOR GEEKS.Jessie Spanonoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3034511096795820355.post-19013394580243197422014-06-25T13:09:58.903-04:002014-06-25T13:09:58.903-04:00Are kidding me? These are both so good and incredi...Are kidding me? These are both so good and incredibly different! All right, here goes...<br /><br />COZY FOR GEEKS:<br />This is the first time I'm reading this entry and I'm hooked. That dang bubble pipe sealed it for me! Wonderful voice.<br /><br />LAVENDER MARRIAGE:<br />I'm still a fan and love the feel of your first 250, you suck me right in with your beautiful words.<br /><br />Hardest decision yet.<br /><br />Victory to COZY FOR GEEKS!Chelsea Morningnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3034511096795820355.post-80644788780841493332014-06-25T13:07:45.819-04:002014-06-25T13:07:45.819-04:00Wow, this is really tough, because I've been r...Wow, this is really tough, because I've been rooting for both of these since the beginning. I'm making my pick based on which one I'd grab off a shelf, and it's purely because I love the voice so much<br /><br />Victory to COZY FOR GEEKSInvidianoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3034511096795820355.post-80403896716746816162014-06-25T12:53:34.271-04:002014-06-25T12:53:34.271-04:00Excellent queries, both of you! I so want to read ...Excellent queries, both of you! I so want to read them both when they get published. I loved the premises and the voice was so alluring. Ultimately, I had to go with what captured me the most. A bubble pipe? How ingenious!<br /><br />Victory to A COZY FOR GEEKS!!!MRS N, the Query Queennoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3034511096795820355.post-52367917374983128462014-06-25T11:47:38.165-04:002014-06-25T11:47:38.165-04:00A Cozy for Geeks:
Still a great query! One thing: ...A Cozy for Geeks:<br />Still a great query! One thing: the period should go inside the quotation marks after "Zoth." In your first 250, there is SO MUCH awesome voice, and I LOVE the idea of a such a unique, fun NA cozy mystery.<br /><br />Lavender Marriage: Wow, this is really good--great plot, great first 250, I have no doubt that this'll be snapped up by an agent so fast it'll make your head spin.<br /><br />This one comes down to subjectivity for me (and I'm sure for all the other judges as well), but because of the awesome voice and the fun uniqueness of the audience/genre combo, VICTORY TO A COZY FOR GEEKS.Artemisnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3034511096795820355.post-56675186110338062622014-06-25T10:18:48.380-04:002014-06-25T10:18:48.380-04:00Both so good! But since I love the idea of the his...Both so good! But since I love the idea of the historical perspective (as well as the story concept) ...<br />Victory to LAVENDER MARRIAGESilverwolfnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3034511096795820355.post-63589660079380328982014-06-25T10:04:47.497-04:002014-06-25T10:04:47.497-04:00This is so difficult!! Like my fellow judges, I ex...This is so difficult!! Like my fellow judges, I expected both these entries to make it to the end! Basing my vote on which book I'd read first if I had them in my hands right now...<br /><br />Victory to LAVENDER MARRIAGE!Khaleesinoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3034511096795820355.post-86850299431773014922014-06-25T09:37:25.635-04:002014-06-25T09:37:25.635-04:00Like Assassin, I had to pick one and vote because ...Like Assassin, I had to pick one and vote because I WANTED BOTH IN THE FINAL ROUND DAMMIT. Okay, I ultimately decided on...<br /><br />VICTORY TO COZY FOR GEEKS.Princess Primrosenoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3034511096795820355.post-31331006880685348732014-06-25T09:14:35.975-04:002014-06-25T09:14:35.975-04:00I'm just closing my eyes and voting on this, c...I'm just closing my eyes and voting on this, cursing that life is not fair as I do. I had these two pegged for my final four. The consolation prize being that whichever one loses will be going to agents that much quicker.<br /><br />Victory to LAVENDER MARRIAGEAllusion Assassinnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3034511096795820355.post-75863505389702886702014-06-25T08:25:53.296-04:002014-06-25T08:25:53.296-04:00GEEKS: There are still some little tweaks this cou...GEEKS: There are still some little tweaks this could do with. Contractions would sound smoother ('He didn't seem like...' and 'he'd told me'). And I still think you only need one use of the past perfect to slide into the flashback before using the past tense, which would read more smoothly ('I thought he was hitting on me', 'I told him'). These words should be hyphenated: life-changing, nautical-themed, twenty-three. And I think these phrases should begin with a capital: It's right up there with "It's dangerous to go alone-- take this!" and "You are the chosen one."<br /><br />LAVENDER: I like that you've expanded this just a little, it brings it alive more and takes us into Ben's point of view more. I still think you need to say something like 'The beakers I was carrying' for clarity, and I'm not at all a fan of 'the full visage' which pulled me right out of the story. I'd just delete it and say 'The words died in his throat as he took in his assailant.' <br /><br />This match-up is insanely hard for me to judge. I would really love to read both these books. Lavender has a lovely Christopher Isherwood feel, and Geeks is so voicey and fun and off-the-wall. In the end, the small difference to me is in the queries - I have a much better idea of what kind of overall story to expect from Geeks' query. Lavender's query leaves me wondering how much of the book will deal with Ben and Iain and co's love story, and how much will be about the court case. I'm not quite sure what the arc will be. So, both fantastic writing, but in the end:<br /><br />VICTORY TO COZY FOR GEEKS.OmarCominnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3034511096795820355.post-89751406979197805962014-06-25T08:22:25.083-04:002014-06-25T08:22:25.083-04:00Judges, please cast votes as a reply to this comme...Judges, please cast votes as a reply to this comment.Michael Anthonyhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/16089879383750676003noreply@blogger.com